Wednesday 7 August 2013

MY SOCCER

''get up'' says my mum I creep down to the living room. "Hurry up!!!!!", says mum "I`m coming" "good" says mum.I say "i`m going to score 1000000 goals"but its
 not true. 3,2,1 GO!!!!! I pass the ball to my team mate. I'm so tired I cant even run so I took a rest. game over I score yay!!!!!'' I score'' I'm so proud of my self. hope I score next time
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  1. Room 3 NCS7 August 2013 at 10:18

    Was it a good goal next time can you describe the goal
    Luca

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  2. Anonymous9 August 2013 at 11:06

    It is fun to writ about things you are interested in. Well done Jamie.
    To be an even better writer next time:
    * Start a new line when very a new character starts talking (this makes it easier for the reader to understand)
    * Use capital letters for the beginning of a new sentence.

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  3. Anonymous11 September 2013 at 12:17

    nice

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  4. Room 3 NCS11 September 2013 at 12:17

    nice work jamie

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  5. Room 3 NCS11 September 2013 at 12:18

    nice work jamie

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  6. Matt1 April 2014 at 10:17

    nice blog jamie

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